Hellothere. I just wanted to thank you for the beta on my fic. I have it posted up in my journal now.
I think I pretty much made all the changes to wording and such you suggested. I tried to describe the chamber a little more, but only ended up addding one sentence. Anything else seemed to disrupt the narrative flow a little.
I realized going into this story that I was asking any reader for a pretty big suspension of disbelief to put Hermione in the situation I needed to. But I added one more line in her conversation with Dumbledore just to try to justify his thinking a little better.
I also slightly tweaked the ending, simply because I can't seem to leave my own pieces alone.
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Date: 2005-02-21 02:14 pm (UTC)I think I pretty much made all the changes to wording and such you suggested. I tried to describe the chamber a little more, but only ended up addding one sentence. Anything else seemed to disrupt the narrative flow a little.
I realized going into this story that I was asking any reader for a pretty big suspension of disbelief to put Hermione in the situation I needed to. But I added one more line in her conversation with Dumbledore just to try to justify his thinking a little better.
I also slightly tweaked the ending, simply because I can't seem to leave my own pieces alone.
Thanx again.